2007-09-05
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Well?
Here's a little bit of the RK oneshot I've been working on. Any critique would be really nice. I haven't really edited it yet. At all. There's definitely stuff that needs to be fixed. But...yeah. Anything at all to make the general whole better? I know a lot of sentences are awkward and the like; I'm working on that. But overall, does the voice work, how's Kenshin's character, etc.?
As a note, it's purely romance, though I tried not to make it sappy or cliched. It takes place directly (or actually, about a week) after Sano leaves in volume 28, and then on--the fic covers about three seperate moments stretching over the period of roughly a month. There are also some direct manga references in here that I haven't checked, so forgive that as well.
( Progression (working title), pts. 1, 2 and 3 )
As a note, it's purely romance, though I tried not to make it sappy or cliched. It takes place directly (or actually, about a week) after Sano leaves in volume 28, and then on--the fic covers about three seperate moments stretching over the period of roughly a month. There are also some direct manga references in here that I haven't checked, so forgive that as well.
( Progression (working title), pts. 1, 2 and 3 )